Title: Detailed Reviews on Example3

Review

The 6SA-text starts really nice. The introduction gives a nice overview of the topic and catches the reader's attention.

Unfortunately, I cannot see which position the author wants to take considering the given task that he/she should imagine being in the Sustainable Business Team of Unilever and has to evaluate their current situation with their supplier to the CEO.

For sentence #3 I cannot give any score because it consists of two sentences which are both quite long. Thus, the point isn't clearly comprehensible anymore.

In point #4, the author does explain a point that critics might have concerning the reason. Therefore, I cannot give any point. In fact, these would be nice points for #2.

Also sentence #5 does not fulfill the first criterion, but is just another reason for Unilever to only use sustainable palm oil.

The conclusion nicely sums up the authors argument.

In total, the author might read the instructions to write a 6SA-method again to be sure about the formal requirements and the content each specific sentence should have. He does bring nice points, but, unfortunately, not in the right places. Also, he should not put his name in the title of his 6SA for the future assignments.